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Thursday, 22 October 2015

THE SUN POEM


Here is a poem about the sun that I have created and finished.
Please leave a comment to help me improve in my work.
Many thanks!
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  1. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:31

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  3. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:32

    Hey Gary.

    I liked the way you used the word rotate.
    Keep it up Gary!!

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  4. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:33

    Hi Gary,
    I like the way you used the word sizzling I like it now im Hungry because of your work. Keep it up

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  5. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:45

    Hi Gary me kanye k so i like the way you gave in grate words about the sun good describing words Gary LOL (:o_o:)

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  6. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:53

    Hey Gary
    I like how you put all the similes and adjectives on your sun Poetry from your adjectives and similes work.
    PEACE!

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  7. Anonymous22 October 2015 at 12:57

    Hi Gary, I really like ALL your descriptive language that you've used.
    Keep it Up!

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  8. Anonymous21 June 2017 at 13:51

    good job gary keep going

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