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Thursday 22 October 2015

THE SUN POEM


Here is a poem about the sun that I have created and finished.
Please leave a comment to help me improve in my work.
Many thanks!

8 comments:

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Anonymous said...

Hey Gary.

I liked the way you used the word rotate.
Keep it up Gary!!

Anonymous said...

Hi Gary,
I like the way you used the word sizzling I like it now im Hungry because of your work. Keep it up

Anonymous said...

Hi Gary me kanye k so i like the way you gave in grate words about the sun good describing words Gary LOL (:o_o:)

Anonymous said...

Hey Gary
I like how you put all the similes and adjectives on your sun Poetry from your adjectives and similes work.
PEACE!

Anonymous said...

Hi Gary, I really like ALL your descriptive language that you've used.
Keep it Up!

Anonymous said...

good job gary keep going

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